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04/30/09
Great insight to the comforts we take for granted. You painted a realistic picture of this mission trip and I enjoyed the journey.
05/01/09
First of all: great title:) Loved the connection with the necklace bookending the story, and the ending was perfect. Well done!
05/02/09
Highly appealing title and a sharp and effective contrast between the spoiled girls and the needy locals.
I have a mission team coming out here in June and we're planning to spend a few nights in one of the African villages. One of the concerns that has already been raised has to do with rats. So I think your premis is entirely consistent.
05/03/09
I love the last line - really shows the changes the trip made in her. And the tile rocks!
05/04/09
I've seen this type of transformation take place over and over again with the brief exposure to missions in developing countries--especially the "I'm no longer comfortable" type response. The soft becomes harder to take when one has perspective. great job!
05/04/09
I love this! Laughed out loud in several places but wow - what a message. Love it all, from the clever title to the impactful last sentence. A truly wonderful entry.
05/04/09
Great detail, wonderful message. Loved the touches of humor.
05/04/09
A wonderful take on the topic. I really liked this piece. You painted a great picture of the place / circumstances, threw in just the right amount of humor and blended it all into a great message. Well done!
05/04/09
I liked the descriptions and the MC in this piece.

Just a small note: it's = contraction for it is. If you want the possessive, then use its (no apostrophe).

Great title and humor in this story.
05/04/09
To say this was good seems so trite. I enjoyed it. It reminded me of my week in Nicaragua, and my return home.
05/06/09
You wrapped your message inside a wonderful story. The MC's heart was shown so well throughout by her words.
Great job.
05/06/09
Loved this and seeing how the Lord transformed the heart of the MC as she experienced what others did not have.
05/06/09
Isn't it sad the things we take for granted that are "luxuries" to other countries? This was a great piece. I especially loved this line:

“Don’t worry. I heard these rats want to Tri Deltas, not Kappas.”

Funny line, but it did not take away from the serious message of this story. Thanks for sharing, Kristen.