The Official Writing Challenge
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04/30/09
Just Brilliant! This is one that transports the reader to another time and place and makes them so glad for the journey. Superb writing.

Mona
04/30/09
I agree...this piece transports to another time and place. Wonderful job with that. One nit-pick: I got tripped up a few times with the change in tense. The story went from past to present several times. I think it would have been stronger if it was written completely in the present tense. Those parts worked better for me. Otherwise, superb. :-)
05/02/09
Deliciously atmospheric. I could almost feel the hot sun beating down.
05/02/09
I felt like I was walking alongside Sophie and her mama. Your word-pictures made this a wonderfully enjoyable story. Your message is clear--there's more to life than money--thanks.
05/02/09
Vivid and lovely. Well done!
05/04/09
Your wonderful descriptions and dialogue create a time and place that makes one long to be there. And I agree about the work-worn hands being a true symbol of love and devotion.
05/04/09
Just LOVE it!
Gorgeous, gorgeous writing.
Your imagery is absolutely lovely, the dialogue very realistic, and the message excellent. A keeper.
05/05/09
I saw it all as I read. Great writing that drew me right in and I loved the dialogue.
I missed this one the first time around, but I'm glad I read it. It's wonderful, with an authentic and powerful voice. Love the mood it sets. Very well done, and congratulations!
05/07/09
Well, Loren. I guess I am just going to have to read everything you've ever written. :D

Awesome! Awesome!

Huge Congrats to you!
05/07/09
Loren, my friend, this piece reads as smooth and rich as butter!! :) WOW! I LOVED it!! CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR EC!!
Love the regionalism flavor and the tone is so endearing. Nice work! :)
05/07/09
I like the strong message you send about, not just acceptance of where God has you, but the enjoyment of being in that place as well. Congratulations on a well-deserved win. The dialogue alone was incredible.
Congratulations on placing with this really lovely piece. It is publishing worthy, to be sure.
05/07/09
I love the vivid description and all the deep emotion conveyed through this simple conversation. Beautiful writing! Congratulations!!
As another commenter said, you transport the reader to another time and place, and I think we fall in love with it. I for one, wanted to stay and eat some of those blackberries myself. :-) Wonderful story, and such a deserving EC pick! Congratulations!
05/07/09
I loved this story and am so glad it placed high in the EC ratings. Congrats.