The Official Writing Challenge
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05/02/09
What a concept! Their determination was so clear.

Your dialogue felt just a bit stilted. Try reading it out loud to see how it sounds so you can make it sound a bit more natural.

Loved the hope at the end.



05/05/09
This story is a unique slant on this week's theme. I enjoyed the drama that was played out from beginning to end, especially the irony of the mother dying twice. What a great truth...God does work in mysterious ways, He really does know what is best.