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Wonderful entry of restored hope. Nicely done.
04/30/09
Excellent story. I felt like I was beside the MC watching the story unfold and experiencing the emotions with her.
05/02/09
Beautiful insight to a grieving heart and how the Lord helps one heal. I loved Max and the part this devoted pet played in your story. I hope your encouraging message is shared with other grieving souls--possibly at your own church.
05/02/09
Oh, what an awesome and beautifully written entry! So simple, and yet so magnificently done. I loved it! Everything, from the boredom to the pills, from Max to the turtledove, and from the grief to the awakening of a new life was perfectly expressed and utterly captivating to this reader. Great job! ...and let me repeat myself, I LOVED IT!
05/02/09
Oops! I forgot something... Solomon! His words were the icing on the cake. (*.*)!
05/04/09
This is incredibly beautiful, and so well done. Excellent work!
05/05/09
Beautifully written. Instead of telling us she's depressed, you showed it by her actions (something I'm STILL trying to figure out how to do). I need to use this story as a good reference point as to how to "show" and not "tell." I was indeed there with your MC feeling her despair, her pain and her hope. Your story fit the theme for the week quite well. Well done!
05/06/09
This is beautiful. Love the biblical references.
As one commenter said -- You did a GREAT job of show vs tell. Very nicely done.
Perfect title, too. :)
Your beautiful story of renewed hope is one of my favorites this week.
I love the symbolism you used. I had a clear picture of the birds, and especially the "injured" dove. You tied scripture in very nicely.
05/06/09
Simply beautiful. What a message of hope through the storm.
What tender story handling a sensitive topic of losing a spouse and having to move on eventually. Neat how the Lord is there to help them move on in His timing.