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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Beginning and End (04/16/09)

TITLE: A Ball of String and a Smile
By Debbie Roome
04/23/09


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“This is a ball of string.” Mrs Bradley holds it up for the class to see. “You’ll be sharing one between two and have the first week of the holidays to use it as a fund raiser. I’m not giving any guidelines except it must be for a charitable cause.”

Tim Schultz lifts his hand. “When does the project begin?”

“First thing Saturday morning. You have the rest of today’s lesson to get into pairs and brainstorm some ideas.”

A few minutes later, I’m in a huddle with my best friend, Lucy. “Any thoughts?”

She shakes her head. “You’re the creative one, Fiona. What do you think?”

I doodle on the page in front of me, lacing stars and crosses into an elaborate mural. “I’d like to help an individual rather than a charity.”

Lucy points at the crosses I’m drawing. “What about a medical need?”

The hospital is austere and antiseptic as we seek out the matron of the children’s ward and present our case. She thinks for a moment. “I’ve someone in mind but will have to check with her parents first. Come and meet Tracy.”

My heart melts when I see the child, a seven year old with a disfigured face that means she can’t smile.

We arrive back at 8 a.m. the next morning and the matron ushers us in to see the hospital administrator. He’s lanky with grey hair, silver spectacles and a stern smile. “We want to raise funds for Tracy’s surgery.” I tell him, “We’ll do it by selling our string at $5 per yard. We’d like permission to run it from Tracy’s bed, through the corridor and into the grounds to generate public interest.”

He nods. “Two conditions. It gets taped along the wall and doesn’t interfere with the hospital routines... and I want to be first to contribute.”

We race to Tracy’s room, waving his cheque. “We’ve got $50 to start!” Her eyes smile at us.

We measure out ten yards and tape it from her bed, down the corridor wall and over the ceiling. Then we go to work, putting up signs we printed out last night. The string begins here...where is it going to end? Tracy needs your help to smile again. I shoot some video footage and take a few photos. Back home, Lucy uploads the story onto YouTube while I call local radio stations and newspapers.

The first day is slow, but we canvass hospital visitors and ask them to tell their friends. The string grows, a yard here and a yard there until it’s out the window and rolling across the stretch of lawn.

The second day, I call the radio stations and newspapers again and this time, I get a response. A couple of reporters come out and a radio station does a live interview with us. “Tracy is a beautiful girl.” I tell them. “We want to help her smile again.”

An hour later a delivery man arrives from a local shop with a carton of string. “Donation from the boss.” the driver explains. “He thinks you’re going to need it.”

The manager of McDonalds down the street is next. “We’re willing to give enough to get the string into our store. We’ll run it past the counter and ask customers to donate as well.”

What happens after that is a blur of string, thousands of YouTube hits and incredible public support. We call in friends and family to help and the money in the bank account swells into thousands and tens of thousands.

By day six, we’ve been through several cartons of string and it winds from Tracy’s bed, through the window, down the street, through McDonalds, through other businesses and churches, through the park and into a suburban area. The media is fully involved now and the message pumps across the airwaves. The string begins here...where is it going to end? Tracy needs your help to smile again.

At the end of day seven, TV cameras are on hand as the bank gives us the total to date. $47, 390 and the money’s still coming in. A reporter puts a mic in my face. “Fiona, you must be thrilled at the response you’ve received. Tell us where this story is going to end.”

I think of the string, beginning at Tracy’s bed, travelling through the town, a cord extended with love. “This story begins at Tracy’s hospital bed.” I say, “And will end at her home with a smile.”


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Lori Othouse 04/23/09
Wow, what an awesome story! It goes to show what we can do with simple beginnings and a lot of heart. Loved this!
Seema Bagai 04/23/09
Wonderful story. Thanks for sharing.
Lynda Schultz 04/24/09
Great story. Could it be based on a recent newspaper/online story about a little boy who needs $60,000 more to remove a tumor from his face, and give him a smile? Pass on the idea—maybe it will work for him too! Well done.
Jan Ackerson 04/28/09
Wonderful fund-raising idea!

I think the past tense would work better for this piece that takes place over several days. Present tense seems to work better for shorter, more introspective stories (but that might be just me).

A very compelling read.
Rachel Rudd04/28/09
I've got tears in my ears just reading this...beautiful story!
Myrna Noyes04/29/09
Excellent story to illustrate our "Beginning and End" topic! Very inspiring! :)
Lollie Hofer 04/30/09
I was also thinking the same thing about the tense (but I'm not nearly as knowlegable as of most you). HOWEVER, this was still a great story from beginning to end and I don't think the "tense" thing takes away one bit from the story at all. It was entertaining and a delight to read.
Holly Westefeld05/05/09
I think this works very well, reading almost like a journal or documentary. My eyes were moist, too.