The Official Writing Challenge
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04/25/09
Oh, I hope there's more to this! Very strong characterization of the king. I really want to know what happened to Joseph and the toddler. Wish you'd had room to tell more of the story!
04/27/09
Wonderful sense of setting in this story.

It was very dialogue-driven, and I found myself wanting to read more of the story. I wonder if you'd consider re-visiting it from a more narrative point of view sometime.

I'd read a longer version of this with great interest!
04/28/09
The Bailiff defending the King's land and the Knight defending the King's subjects... and the King yet to make a decision. Wow! 750 words is simply not enough.
04/28/09
I agree that I'd like to hear more of the story. Compelling characters! I think Joseph should have spoken up earlier about the child... but maybe he hadn't been given the opportunity. Well done.
04/28/09
Excellent dialogue (which I think is the hardest of all the master in writing).
04/29/09
The description of the serfs' lives was especially well done in your story, and you captured the setting well. I'd like to read more.
04/29/09
I enjoyed reading this and the approach to the topic. Interesting moral to the story as well.