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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Beginning and End (04/16/09)

TITLE: The Tortoise and the Hare...Revisited
By Verna Cole Mitchell


One day Terrence the Tortoise and Harold the Hare were talking about the big race of their great, great grandfathers, made famous by Aesop. Said Harold to Terrence, “You know the tale is told that your ancestor won, but I think I am faster and smarter than he was. Let me prove it to you.” So they decided on a place and a time for their race to begin.

At the honk of the goose to start the race, the competitors began together, Terrence creeping and Harold leaping. But soon Harold became interested in all there was to see along the way and started to slow down. First he was distracted by the cute bunny cheerleaders. He strutted over to chat with them a bit and let them feel the softness of his ears. One of them, who was not as interested in him as the others were, boxed his nose. So he hopped off as high as he could to show off his cute cottontail.

Then he noticed a field of lettuce on the side of the road, and since he was hungry, he decided to stop for a salad. He garnished it with some grass and twigs and enjoyed his lunch. Afterwards, he was so full, he stretched out in a field of clover to take a nap.

When he woke up, he joined in a jumping game with some of his furry pals. He bragged to them about how badly he was going to beat Terrence in the race.

Back on the road, Harold looked ahead to see where his competitor was, and all he could see was a tiny speck in the distance. At that, he began to push on his long hind legs to catch up. When he got close to the finish line and was even with his rival, he could see Terrence was not moving. Harold stopped to see what the matter was and noticed that the tortoise shell was marked by tire treads and had been cracked in half, with Terrence flattened below it on the road. Harold stepped easily over the line and ended the race.

And the moral of the story is: Slow and steady does not always win the race. You also have to keep your eyes open to anything that might prevent you from making it safely to the end.

…he who stands firm to the end will be saved. (Matthew 10:22b)NIV

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Seema Bagai 04/23/09
I'm laughing out loud at this piece. Good work.
Rachel Stone04/27/09
Lollie Hofer04/27/09
You should have seen how BIG my eyes were when I read the part about the tire tracks. Boy, did I NOT see that coming. What a great take on an age-old story. Well done!
Betty Castleberry04/27/09
Oh, poor tortoise. I didn't see that coming. This is cute, and I loved the message.
Jan Ackerson 04/28/09
Loved the twist! It made me snort out loud.
Sharon Kane04/28/09
Not a flop at all! It had me laughing and I read it to my kids, who all love Aesop. And it makes me wonder how would his stories have been different if motor cars had existed back then?
Myrna Noyes04/28/09
This is GREAT! What a creative, modern-day fable with a powerful message! I loved how the race started with the honk of the goose, and the part about the bunny cheerleaders was too funny! :) The twist at the end was a surprise that packed a punch! I loved it!!
Chely Roach04/28/09
This is SO not a flop! I love it! What a great twist...so funny. LOL
Dena Wilson04/29/09
This was great. I loved the shocking ending. I was casually reading along expecting the same ending, and then wham the poor turtle is dead. I think a story is great when it picks you up and throws you somewhere else.
Verna Cole Mitchell 04/29/09
I liked your beginning and ending of a marriage story very much. It was really a nice touch to have the MC's son keep her from being chilled as her husband had done.
Verna Cole Mitchell 04/29/09
ooooooooooooops. (red face) comment on wrong story!
Loren T. Lowery04/29/09
Well, in my book the tortoise still won. He got to heaven before that near-do-well rabbit : )
Beckie Stewart04/29/09
I like your new tortoise/hare tale. Good job!
Carol Slider 04/29/09
I feel sorry for the turtle--I'm always sad when I see one along the side of the road. But you certainly gave this familiar story a very creative twist!
Joy Faire Stewart04/29/09
Oh, poor Terrence. I wasn't expecting the twist. Great message.
Kimberly Russell04/29/09
This was terrific- very creative and funny.
LauraLee Shaw04/29/09
awwwwww, you GOT ME!!! You absolutely blow me away with your writing! Brilliantly hilarious and clever.
Joanney Uthe04/29/09
I LOVE IT! You definitely got me with the twist at the end. The message is so appropriate for our time as I think many will be as just unaware as the tortoise.
Joshua Janoski04/30/09
HAHA! I'm reading and thinking that this story is going to end exactly like the classic fable did, and then you totally caught me off guard with the hilarious ending. You had a great lesson of your own tucked into your unique spin of this classic fable.
Janice Fitzpatrick05/13/09
Oh my goodness.:0) Poor little hard shell guy.:0) Got your message in this cute piece and I loved it and your humor is right on.:0) Nice job.