The Official Writing Challenge
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A nice take on the topic.
08/01/05
sweet, I quite enjoyed this and thought it was very creative!
I like this! Believable and truthful, the raw realities are exposed for all to see. Love the punch line: "This is what counts. This is what we are looking for…the state of your heart...and Mr Josiah…yours is not quite broken enough."
08/02/05
Tis true, what an awesome story, and very effective. Great! God bless ya, littlelight
08/02/05
So many miss the kingdom of heaven by just 18 inches - the distance from their head to their heart. Excellent, well-written piece!
08/04/05
Good characterizations. Well written.
A contender indeed! Loved every bite!
08/05/05
Definately top 8 in my opinion. I don't mind God making brownies, but do I have to spend eternity with purple stationary? ;-)
ha ha "the complaints department in the kingdon of God"- great phrase, nice message
Very enjoyable and good point!
08/05/05
Impressive and imaginative. Oh, that it was this easy to see what we were doing wrong!
08/06/05
Lovely attention to details that bring the piece alive: the narrator’s thoughts and feelings, his desk, Josiah's body language, the narrator's relationship with his Boss. Creative piece which worked to the last word.
08/07/05
Good writing here. I enjoyed your mix of dialogue, descriptions and thoughts.