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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Up and Down (04/02/09)

TITLE: War-faring
By Laury Hubrich
04/08/09


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A lanky youth sat on the rocky bank of a stream as his line hung lazily from a pole. Brady watched the still water and then became mesmerized by the soft ripples his toes made when he poked them gently in the water.

“How’s your mom doing, Brady,” Grandpa Joe asked.

Brady put his head down to hide tears. “Not real good but we deal with it.”

Brady reeled in his line then cast again. It made a perfect arc, up above the water, then a tiny splash back down. “Gramps, I wish life was calm like the bobber just sitting there. Think things will ever change?”

Joe cast his line as he gathered his thoughts. “We can pray, Son. We can pray.”

***

The intruder didn’t bother to enter quietly. It clanged and banged as if it owned the place. It knew no fear because it was Fear. The creature cracked its gnarled knuckles in preparation for the attack.

The victim laid in bed, curled up in a fetal position. She heard it. She knew the intruder was coming. Terror filled her soul. Every noise it made was louder than the last.

It came so close to her that she could smell its rancid breath. The monster bent down beside her. Hailey could see its face, etched with deep wrinkles and eyes that bulged. It hissed in her ear, “Where is your god now? Let’s see him stop me from doing – this!”

Claws came at her face and then grabbed her shoulders. She couldn’t fight it off. The creature let go and then reared back its hairy body and jumped.

Hailey tried to shield herself but it was too late. With each wave of pain, she grabbed her head and moaned. The being worked from the inside – it pushed and prodded – it never let go.

She whispered, “Lord, where are you? What have I done wrong?” Tears fell across her cheek onto her pillow. Hailey began to spiral down into a quick free fall.

Hailey wasn’t surprised when she plopped down into a murky lake. She had no fight left in her. No extra breath to cry out to her Lord. She sank to the bottom and there she stayed.

The creature held up his fist in victory. Doubt had been planted once again. This day was indeed a victory.

***

Brady’s eyes grew big. “Grandpa.” Brady pointed to a spot where the water splashed. He cast his line to the exact place.

Joe watched his grandson’s face turn white. “What is it, Brady?”

Brady whispered, “I’m not sure. Something’s wrong. I feel like we’re supposed to fish and pray.”

Joe didn’t understand but he trusted this young man. Together the two prayed and fished like they never had before.

***

Hailey was familiar with this place. She knew she needed to call out to God for help but she convinced herself that God truly did abandon her this time. Just when she was ready to give up hope something caught her eye. She reached up and grabbed hold of a line.

***

“I’ve got something, Gramps. It’s a big one, too. But Gramps, we gotta keep praying.”

“Brady, it’s your mom we’re praying for, right?” Joe asked as the realization hit him.

Brady never let his eyes pull away from the line. “Yes, Mom’s in trouble.”

“Son, we’re doing some spiritual war-faring, so the devil better beware.” The young and old together stormed heaven’s gates.

***

The closer to the surface Hailey got, the more her faith grew.

***

“Help me Gramps.” Brady jerked the line and a large fish soared up out of the water and hung down from the line. The boy’s knees buckled. “We did it, Gramps!”

***

Hailey burst out of the water. It refreshed her to feel the warm sun on her upturned face as she floated on her back. But then – just as suddenly as she fell, she found herself back in her darkened room.

***


Brady rushed to his mom’s side, his prized fish hanging from a stringer.

Hailey hugged her son. “It was you and Grandpa that prayed for me today, wasn’t it? I saw a line and all I had to do was reach out and grab it.”

“Grandpa said we did some spiritual warfare.” Brady smiled.

Satan’s fist of victory turned into one of defeat. He spat on the two and muttered murderous threats as he left the way he entered. “Next time…”


Authors Note:
Ephesians 6:12 (KJV) “For we wrestle not against flesh and blood, but against principalities, against powers, against the rulers of the darkness of this world, against spiritual wickedness in high places.”


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Shirley McClay 04/09/09
Awesome. Well written and compelling. Plus an awesome message. I love how upbeat and full of hope and victory you were able to make this!
Beckie Stewart04/10/09
Wow, I love this. I love the way your brought the power of prayer into this entry! This was so uplifting and a good reminder of the power we do have on our knees for others.
LauraLee Shaw04/10/09
Wowwwww, that was amazing. Masterful writing. All of my emotions got involved. Well done. I want to be that sensitive, to pray and intercede for someone when the Spirit prompts.
Verna Cole Mitchell 04/11/09
I love it when the Lord prompts someone to pray for another who is too weak to withstand the taunts of the devil. Your story shows this beautifully.
Myrna Noyes04/14/09
Very well-written story of spiritual warfare through prayer! I like how the "fishing and praying" tied in with Hailey's struggle and eventual victory. I appreciated your encouraging message!
Beckie Stewart04/16/09
Yes!! Congratulations! Way to go my friend! See how God blessed you with a creative good story in the trial!!! Proud of you girl!!!
Sonya Leigh04/16/09
This was a masterfully woven story. Congratulations on your terrific placing here and in EC.
Myrna Noyes04/16/09
CONGRATULATIONS on your 2nd Place EC win! I love stories about the power of prayer, and yours was so well-told! :)
Joshua Janoski04/16/09
I love the way that you wove this tale by using the fishing line as a representation of interceeding for the woman and pulling her out of her despair. Well deserved EC, Laury.
Beth LaBuff 04/16/09
Excellent story, Laury! You planned this out so well. Congrats on your EC!!!!
Charla Diehl 04/16/09
Powerfully written piece based on the importance of prayer. Congratulations on your EC placement.
Karlene Jacobsen 04/16/09
This was quite intense. I liked it very much. Congratulations on placing.
Rachel Rudd04/17/09
I liked the imagery you painted here with your words. Well done! Congratulations on the win!
Sara Harricharan 04/17/09
WOOT!!! You placed??!!! and no one told me??!! LOL!

Way ta go, Hally! Awesome story! I just loved it. Glad that she won in the end. ^_^
Chely Roach04/18/09
Absolutely marvelous. Congrats on placing with this fantastic story!
Karen Wilber 04/19/09
Great visual and message. Congrats on EC!
Seema Bagai 04/21/09
Wonderful descriptions and powerful emotions. Congrats!
Amy Michelle Wiley 04/23/09
Very creative the way you connected the scenes and portrayed the pain and doubt. More powerful even, knowing the background of the author. :-) Great job.
Laura Anne Harrison05/03/09
Laury, this is one of the most powerful uplifting articles I've ever read on the "Power of Prayer"! Isn't it wonderful what God can do when we place things and people in His Hands? Thank you for writing and sharing this beautiful piece. Congratulations on your EC win.God bless you.