The Official Writing Challenge
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03/19/09
Oh.. what an exciting story. I love when my brain can open up and think of God as being outside human dimensions. Doesn't happen often! Thank you!
03/21/09
Very creative and with an excellent message.
03/23/09
Such a daring leap of imagination.

Somehow you presented rather exotic material in a very readable way.

Well-done, well-done indeed.
03/24/09
This is so very fun to read, and what a message! I could clearly see your mc zooooping around. Your discriptions were very vivid. Again. . . WHAT A MESSAGE!
03/24/09
I was beginning to feel tipsy along with your mc :)

Well done. I often wonder why we think that we have God all figured out. This was a great piece! Thanks for making us think outside of our human experience.
03/24/09
I ZOOOOOPD right along with you. Felt a little like I had been spinning around and then tried to walk straight.
Interesting. Got my attention. Young, creative.
Mona
03/24/09
Very unique approach to the topic. You made a "complicated" issue so simply. I really enjoyed reading this--great job.
03/24/09
Wildly creative, and a rollicking fun read! Loved this!
03/24/09
Wonderfully imaginative. This should remind us all that we cannot put God in our own little "box". Good job!
03/24/09
Those sound effects - and that tone - are WONDERFUL. Such a fun entry.
03/24/09
What a great reminder of how little we know and comprehend of God's Kingdom. Well done!
03/24/09
I don't understand it is an understatement in my life. You took an incredibly complex topic and brought it to my understanding, thank you.
03/24/09
This was seriously deep, yet totally light enough to read and reread with complete enjoyment. Fantastic handle on the topic (and WOW, so creative - where on earth did you think of these "common" things?)
03/25/09
Very creative you certainly zapped me into your story!
Well done.
03/25/09
Sorry meant to also thank you for your comments on my article. Much appreciated.
03/25/09
Whew! I'm dizzy with all that zooming around!
Very creative and interesting!
03/25/09
Fantastic imagination! You made me feel small without feeling bad about it.
This is the kind of message I always want to give to the JWs when they try to wrap God in a box and hand Him out in neat little packages - only I never can find words to describe the indescribable...
Very well done indeed.
03/26/09
Gerald, you are certainly not going backwards in your writing quality! This was creative, fun and well written.
03/26/09
Wonderful concept for this topic. I like the "sound effects", and the humor was just enough - you added lightness without belittling the deeper meaning of your article.

Itty-bitty red ink: "envelope" is a noun, "envelop" was the word you meant. And I think the ending would have been stronger if you stopped after the last "zooooop". The last two lines feel tacked on.

I like the way you start, tho. I can sense the MC wanting to blurt out the whole thing, then having to back up. The voice is good, very personable and "real".