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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Kingdom of God (03/12/09)

TITLE: Women Sure Are Sneaky
By Henry Clemmons
03/18/09


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As a man, I hate to read anything
That doesnít have a box score under it
Donít much care for hot tea
Gardens
And especially
Seeds that grow flowery type things that end up in
Garden like places.

Now, donít get me wrong
As a man, I can appreciate a flower
They serve their purpose
Especially
When the ball gameís late
And my dinnerís gotten cold
A bunch of flowery looking flowers
With some of that green grassy stuff
Between the red and yellow bloomy things
Can come in handy
When wifeís mood has turned nasty
Because I was late
Again.

But, as a general rule, as a man
Besides hating to read,
I Donít much care for gardens
And especially, not their seeds.

As a man, though, sometimes
We eat our words
There are days, or nights
Like last night
Where the flowery thing with the green grassy stuff
In a glassy type flower holder
Didnít work as planned.
So,
Alone on the couch
I read
About a seed
A
Small seed
A
Very, very small seed.

The Kingdom of God
It read
Is like this
Little seed.

No wonder
I thought
I never noticed.

How could I have faith
In something so
Small, so
Very
Very small?

When I said I hated to read
I wasnít completely honest
I love to Google
I Google anything
Iím a research junkie
So,
I Googled this seed.

I was
Again
Amazed
That the plant that grows from this seed
This very small
Little seed
Can grow and crack cement.

Now, that is cool
I like strength
Can relate in a manly
Kind of way
So,
I, being a man
With a few cemented places
In my life
Where stubbornness hides
And laughs
And even makes fun of
Seed like things that can grow gardens
or
Strongholds
Like my wife and her pastor daddy
Would call them
Anyway,
If my journey
So to speak
To the Kingdom of God
Can begin with this little
Seed
This
Small
Very small seed,
Then God,
I ask that you plant it
Here
In me
So it can grow
And break up this concrete
That has me sleeping
On the couch
Tonight.

Amen.

I wonder, though, as a man
If my wife
Planted this Bible
By the couch
For me to read.
The print was small
I needed my glasses
That also
Were conveniently
Next to the bible.

Hmmmmmmm.

Women sure are sneaky.


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Ruth Ann Moore03/19/09
I loved your description of flowers, and the POV of your character. The mustard seed and plant are amazing. I truly believe there are numerous reasons why God chose the mustard seed for this comparison. It is amazing the parallels one can make and lessons one can learn from that lowly seed.
Paula Titus 03/19/09
Simply delightful! And I laughed out loud at "green grassy stuff." Great writing.
Ruth Hayes03/19/09
The "red and yellow bloomy things" made me chuckle! Well done!
Marlene Bonney 03/20/09
I like your honesty and humor in this unique poetic piece. Sounds like it's personal truth learned, and right on with the subject.
Jan Ackerson 03/21/09
Wonderful voice, and great fun to read--and surprising depth nestled amidst the humor.
Diana Dart 03/23/09
Well, your title drew me in, your humour kept me reading (and giggling) and the ending made me "humpf" and nod emphatically. Good for your sneaky wife (and a great piece of writing as well!)
Carol Slider 03/24/09
An excellent message, presented in a humorous and appealing way. Well done!
Bryan Ridenour03/24/09
Well done. Creative...humorous...engaging. Loved the strength of the seed...breaking up concrete. Reminds me once again of the power of God and His ability to tear down barriers that prevent people from coming to Him.
Karlene Jacobsen 03/24/09
I enjoyed the humor here. Did not know that mustard plants can crack concrete when growing. Very interesting...
Mona Purvis03/24/09
Being one of the 'sneaky' gender, let me sneak in here and tell you how much fun this is.
Your very irregular lines added to the confusion of the MC and showed a better picture of him.
Loved it!

Mona
Chely Roach03/26/09
This was fantastic, from the title to the last line. Loved it.
TJ Nickel03/26/09
I really enjoyed the beginning of this one and was reading with excitement...the first two stanza's were excellent and edgy, but then I must've fallen off the edge (maybe I missed something??).