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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Kingdom of God (03/12/09)

TITLE: Case No 4653
By Melanie Kerr
03/17/09


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"The kingdom of heaven is like treasure hidden in a field. When a man found it, he hid it again, and then in his joy went and sold all he had and bought that field.”

“Dobs, you take Jansen with you and find all you can about the treasure! I want to know what that treasure was doing buried in a field. Get a complete list. Look in some databank or other to see if anything has been reported as missing. Check the archives. Go back a good number of years. See if you can find an owner. Give me a name! And while you are at it see if you can’t get hold of some of that treasure. We’ll process it for fingerprints. Carbon dating might give us a time-frame, tell us how long it had been in the soil.

“Hargreaves, you and Jackson are going to visit the field. I want soil samples and a detailed history of what crops have been sown and harvested over the last say…fifty..no, go back a hundred years. I want to you set up surveillance teams and record the names the times of people who cross that field on a regular basis. Set up cameras if you need to. Find out about the local laws regarding trespassing. Check of rambling rights too. See if you can find an owner of the field. Look in the land registry files. And check with the local estate agents. They may know something. See if the land has been rented out. Give me names, dates, anything that you think might have a bearing on the case. In fact, Hargreaves, take a team with you, and diggers, I want that field ripped to pieces. Who knows what else is buried out in that field? Could be more treasure. Could be bodies!

“Chesterfield, I want you to get a picture from the newspaper of the man. They did that double spread just recently. Talk to the journalist. See what information he gleaned during the interview. Pass the picture on to Interpol, the FBI, the CIA, M15…I want to know if the man has a criminal record. Interview some of his neighbours and his work colleagues…talk to the folks he went to school with. I want to find out what kind of a man he is. Go through his garbage if you have to. Put a tap on his phone. I want him followed.

“Haversham, get down to the bank. Swing by the judge’s office and get a warrant. I want to know exactly what kind of assets that man sold to buy the field. I want to know where he got the money from. We may be dealing with a money launderer. He could be the middle man for arms dealing, or drugs or any combination of shady businesses…I want to know. See if you can finding anything at all that we can use to bring the man in for questioning – parking fines, unpaid bills - anything at all.

“Lads, there is just something about this case that makes me uneasy. It shouldn’t be that easy to find treasure like that. Was he digging around that field with a spade or something? Did he have a map? Was he just lucky, or did someone tell him where to dig?

“And what is this Kingdom of Heaven thing anyway. I am going to dig out a map and see if I can’t find a location for us.”

“Right, we’ll convene back at the office at 1900 hours. Let’s hope we get some answers!”




* Matthew 13:44 New International Version (NIV) Copyright © 1973, 1978, 1984 by International Bible Society


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Verna Cole Mitchell 03/20/09
I really enjoyed the out-of-the-box creativity here.
Joanne Sher 03/20/09
Hehe - clever and fun. Reminds me of one of my older pieces - but you did it much better. Fun stuff!
Rachel Rudd03/23/09
Very cute! You sounded like onw of the detectives from CSI or some such show. One little thing "See if you can finding anything at all." I think it might also have been fun to have someone talk back to this detective...interaction and all that...just my opinion though. God bless!
Gerald Shuler 03/23/09
Your MC is a true modern day Duh-Brain! Duh... but it was a great take on the topic and I enjoyed this investigation a lot. I figure every one on his team is likely to find the true treasure and the MC will STILL be trying to put the pieces together!
Gregory Kane03/23/09
Love the humour and the sheer idiocy of the investigation. Of course, were I the one being investigated, how well would my life stand up to such close scrutiny? An uncomfortable thought.
Jan Ackerson 03/24/09
This one just begs to be performed!
Sheri Gordon03/24/09
Excellent voice. Great job compacting so much information in so few words. Very good read.
Karlene Jacobsen 03/24/09
This is very creative. It is quite directive. I can imagine people of this day doing much of the same in trying to locate this treasure.
Mona Purvis03/24/09
Written as though you understand the inner workings of the political machine!
Almost like one of those phone calls where you push numbers on the menu and after 20 minutes you find yourself back where you started.
Interesting.

mona
Anne Linington03/25/09
Loved this piece with the officer directing all possible avenues of investigation. The names seemed British to me, as did "neighbours". I thought placing the verse at the beginning gave the game away, and it could have appeared at the end.