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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Africa (03/05/09)

TITLE: Truly Emancipated
By Bryan Ridenour
03/11/09


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"We's more than slaves chil'," said Mammy, mixing up a batch of cornbread.

"But Mammy, th' white's...they never gonna see us as bein' anythin' more than slaves," griped Mammy's grandson, Samuel. "We's jus' property, and you knows it!"

"Sh, chil’ you got t’ keep your belly achin’ down,” she warned. “Th’ Missus is in th’ other room… Y'r right Samuel, we’s property. Th’ property of th’ Almighty," she remarked, shaking a wooden spoon in his face. "We mus' never forget who we is.”

"Oh, Mammy..."

"Don'chu oh...Mammy...me, chil'. You sit down at this table and we's gonna have ourselves a talk."

Mammy fished in her apron's pocket and retrieved a shiny red apple, handing it to her grandson. He wiped it on his sleeve and bit in enthusiastically, juice dribbling down the side of his mouth.

"Years ago, long b'fore you's born, our people lived in a place far 'cross th' ocean...Sierra Leone. Th' whites knew it as th' Rice Coast. Our people was called th’ Temne. Only black folk lived there and they worked hard growin' rice. Some times after dark th’ whole village would gather ‘round a large fire…oh the carryings-on. We’d have ourselfs a hoe-down. Life was good then...almos' free."

"What do y' mean, almos' free?"

"Now chil' you jus' hold on, and I'll git there," she scolded. "I c’n tell you this, our people weren't slaves like they is today, and that’s th’ truth."

Mammy pushed away from the table and peered into the sitting room. Seeing her Missus napping, she thumped back down into her chair.

"One day things changed. White plug-uglies arrived with guns and such. They captured th’ Temne and marched 'em all back t’ a ship. Our people didn' know what was happenin', but they sure were skeered.”

Mammy's voice caught with emotion. She closed her eyes and wiped away the tears that leaked out.

"They throw'd 'em in th' hold of that ship and made 'em lay on shelves stacked six high. There wasn' even room t’ sit up. People laid there f’r weeks on en', being fed food not fit f’r hogs. They couldn' even move t’ relieve theirselfs. Chil' you can't begin t' imagine th’ smell. Many of our people got sick and died and th' slave traders left th' bodies t’ rot with th' livin'.”

"As soon as they ported in South Carolina, they was sold at auction and went to workin' in rice fields like back home...'cept it weren't f’r there fam'lies any longer. Our people went from one slavery t’ another 'un."

"But, Mammy," Samuel interrupted, "I thought our people started out free."

"They was chil’, in a sense."

"What d’ y’ mean Mammy?" Samuel asked leaning forward.

"Our people prayed t’ spirits of their ancestors. They believed in a god, but not th' true one. Our people weren' slaves t' white people but t' their own foolish superstitions. Samuel, I'm more free today, than I was in Sierra Leone," she said, grinning widely.

Samuel's eyes grew large. "By the horn spoons, Mammy! You was in that ship?"

Mammy nodded. "I was knee-high t’ a milk stool when I got t’ America. I ended up on this plantation and I's been here ever since. We's blessed, Grady. Not ev'ry Massa's God fearin' like ours’n. He even tells us 'bout Jesus and that's how I learnt we really wasn' free back home. If I's never free ag'in in this life, I'll be free in th’ next."

Mammy stood, stepped to the stove and stirred a simmering pot of stew. Grady followed and leaned into his Mammy's side.

"So Mammy, even though I's a slave, I's really free?"

"You know Jesus, chil'?"

"Yes, Mammy."

"Then you's free!"

********
"What’s it been, Mammy, ten years maybe ‘leven? You’s right. I was free all those years wit’ Jesus. But, I's free here...now...to. God used that Mr. Lincoln t’ set all we slaves free. I wish y’ could see me. I c'n walk the streets of Richmond without fear of bein' sold. I's even got a job at th' shipyards. Oh,” he grinned, “I found me a wife a year back. You's gonna have a great-grand chil' soon. I'll make sure he comes t’ meet y'."

Samuel smiled as songbirds chattered in the Oak above. This is a perfect spot, Mammy, he thought. Grady stooped and placed two red roses at a wooden head stone. The crudely carved letters told the story:


Delilah "Mammy" Baker
Faithful Servant
Free at Last



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Pamela Kliewer03/13/09
Well done! I really like this. You captured the voice perfectly. I love how you wove in that despite what happened with Mammy coming over on a slave ship, God had HIS purpose for her.
Catrina Bradley 03/16/09
Wonderful dialect, and mixing the actions (like stirring the stew) amongst the dialog really made the story pop. I love Mammy's attitude about freedom in Christ, and how she passed it on down to the younger generations. The ending is wonderful.
Mona Purvis03/16/09
I read this earlier and didn't comment right away. It's one of those you have to think about. What I thought about was the slave cemeteries all around where I live. Some on my families homeplace. Lots of them with no last name. Some filtered in with the white families. Truly a different time. So many stories of faith and triumph, bitterness and love. Loved the attitude of the MC.
Mona
Chely Roach03/16/09
Love the title! I think you did a great job with the dialect, and the characterizations were perfect. Wonderful.
Connie Dixon03/17/09
This is a tear-jerker and a wonderful picture of true freedom. Also, a terrbile reminder of the cruelty we humans can put on one another. A well-written entry.
Karlene Jacobsen 03/17/09
Loved the attitude of Mammy. The truth that one is not free without Christ woven right into the fabric of this story really captured me.
Ruth Ann Moore03/17/09
I absolutely loved your story. From the voices of Mammy and Samuel to the endearing truth you portrayed. Incredible.
Jan Ackerson 03/17/09
Great title, and I really love the relationship portrayed here.

I'm going to differ with the previous commentators about the dialect--it may be just a tad overdone, making it border on stereotypical. Consider that you can suggest a slave dialect by using about half of the non-standard spellings and grammar differences as you did, and run less of a risk of tapping into stereotypes.

Highly creative entry, very well-written.
Christina Banks 03/18/09
Great story! I got lost at one point when "Grady" was mentioned twice. Did you mean "Samuel"? I love the way you showed that true freedom is through Jesus.
Bryan Ridenour03/18/09
For others who will read this, yes, Christina just pointed out a blunder and I am so glad she did. I had researched first names of slaves and initially I went with Grady, but changed to Samuel. I don' know how many times I read and re-read to make sure I had changed them all...I still missed two!!!!
Eliza Evans 03/18/09
White plug-uglies arrived with guns and such. They captured th’ Temne and marched 'em all back t’ a ship.

White people did not run through the jungles trapping Africans, making them slaves.
By and large, Africans were sold to Europeans etc. by .. other Africans. Slavery was (and still is) alive and well in Africa.

I really don't think Temne is a word she would have used back then. Or Sierra Leone for that matter.

Also, I am not sure your time frame as Sierra Leone was set up as a haven for freed slaves by the British in 1787.

I like the character of Mammy. I would have loved to have a Mammy like that! But I think she remembers way too much detail from when she was little. (wink) Although the dialect sounds overdone, I think it is quite authentic. If it was scaled back though, I think it would read easier and flow more smoothly.

Couple spelling mistakes. To -when it should be Too. There -when it should be Their.

LOVE the truth in the message here. ""You know Jesus, chil'?..
Then you's free!"
Makes my spirit soar.:)
Good job.
Laury Hubrich 03/18/09
You did an excellent job telling this story. Really truly:)
Henry Clemmons03/18/09
Emancipated is one of my favorite words. Loved the story.
Anita Vander Elst03/19/09
Bryan, in regards to replacing a name that repeats in your story so you don't miss one. Word processing program tool bars have a way to do that under Edit called Find or Replace. I found out about it after I submitted a story where I changed the name but missed one. Hope that helps!


   
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