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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Passport (07/25/05)

TITLE: Do You Have Anything To Declare?
By Al Boyce
07/25/05


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The man glanced furtively left, right, then left again before kicking his scuffed dufflebag foward on the tile floor, one step closer to the Customs counter. He feigned disinterest, affected a yawn, but couldn't hide the tic of anxiety that danced across his face.

Ceiling fans flailed lazily at buzzing flies above his head.

It wasn't the heat that coaxed a droplet of sweat from his hairline and to the end of his nose.

"Why am I doing this?" he thought. There was no way he could get through. Clearly his situation was hopeless, and he was doing nothing to improve it by standing in this endless line.

"Next!" barked a uniformed customs officer.

"Do you have anything to declare?"

Sheepishly, the man emptied his pockets -- a switchblade knife, pack of condoms, a half-smoked reefer. Already he had the officer's undivided attention.

Slowly the man reached behind his back and pulled out the semi-automatic pistol, gingerly placing it on the counter.

"Hey, I need some backup!" the officer shouted. Soon the man was jockeyed into a windowless, cinderblock room, spread-eagled against the wall.

They frisked him and inventoried -- a cellophane bag of cocaine, a rock of crack, a handful of diskettes containing child pornography.

Gingerly, as a man might handle an infant's overflowing diaper, the officers opened the duffle bag.

Plastic explosives, timers, duct tape. A disassembled automatic rifle. Nerve gas. Handcuffs. A blonde wig.

"I think we've seen enough," grunted a heavy-set guard, his gun leveled at the man.

The guard cocked his head toward a door. "In there. Now!"

Grimly, the man did as he was told, entering a cool, dark room with the sound of dripping water coming from what looked like an abandoned swimming pool.

"Strip!" the guard snarled. The man complied.

"In the water, now! I haven't got all day."

The water was chilly, but not unpleasant. Really not a bad place to die, the man thought.

Suddenly, strong arms grabbed him from both sides, throwing him backwards under the water. Immediately, he could feel the life draining from him. Really no point in struggling.

Then the hands that gripped him pulled him upward and, gasping, he was restored to the dim reaches of the room.

He heard the echoes of words fading around him, "... name of the Father, son and Holy Spirit."

The guard, no longer brandishing a gun, helped him out of the pool and handed him some clean, linen garments.

The man dressed quickly, then followed the guard back to the customs counter.

There was no sign of his bag or any other possessions.

The customs agent, now smiling, handed him a leather folder and bowed.

"Your passport, sir," he said. "Everything seems to be in order."

------

This Sunday, my wife and I experienced the joy of water baptism at our new church.

We had both been baptized as children -- sprinkled with water in a ceremony that held little meaning for us at that early age. But we were no longer comfortable having just a sprinking of Jesus. We wanted to be fully immersed, to leave nothing untouched.

It's still a symbolic gesture, in one way. But in another, it is a message in a language that God understands, saying, "I'm yours."

It can be your passport to freedom.


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Marjorie Arrowood08/01/05
Beautiful! I loved the symbolic detail of buzzing flies above his head! Excellent read.
Debra Brand08/01/05
Excellent. Drama, intrigue, salvation and glory!
darlene hight08/01/05
Awesome entry! Perfect illustration.
Nina Phillips08/01/05
That was wonderful how this experience was shared. In the name of the Lord Jesus, the exhalted name of God. Very beautiful, and touching. God bless, littlelight
Linda Watson Owen08/01/05
Wonderful images! Beautifully written!
Beth Muehlhausen08/01/05
Beautifully done! A wonderful story full of deep implications.
Pat Guy 08/03/05
Boy - did I enjoy reading this! Great! Pat
Shari Armstrong 08/04/05
Awesome!!! Wonderful discriptions.
Amy Michelle Wiley 08/05/05
Wow, I liked that. Well done!
Maxx .08/05/05
Interesting way to approach the topic. I liked the read. Watch the use of adverbs. They detract from an otherwise great story.
Dixie Phillips 08/05/05
Wow! You have a huge gift of writing! Felt like I was right there hearing the buzzing flies! Great job!
Cyndie Odya-Weis08/05/05
Compelling- it guided me along- very nice interpretation of the passport theme
Val Clark08/06/05
Sucked me right in, wondered where it was going and hoped it wouldn't disappoint. And it didn't! Great analogy. Loved it. Well done.
Sandra Petersen 08/07/05
When I began reading, I was wondering what kind of line. Then it became clear. The imagery is wonderful. A refreshing look at adult baptism. I questioned the idea of being forced into the water; baptism, as well as responding to the initial call to receive the Savior, is always a choice. You did convey very well the idea of the shame over past sins and the desire that not every sin be exposed. But God knows the depths of the soul, right? Well done!
Deborah Porter 08/08/05
Al, what a great take on the topic of "passport." Well done. I'm just popping in to let you know that you were in the semi-finals and actually did very well. You came in at 11th place overall, so you weren't that far off the Editors' Choice awards. You are really writing up a storm since getting back into the Challenge. It's great to see. Love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)