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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Car Trip (07/18/05)

TITLE: The Lucky One
By Sally Hanan
07/25/05


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You love that car, donít you.

"Oh yes Lord, I do. The color, the shape, the way it zips around the corners and fits into parking spaces other cars canít get into, itís so awesome. It cost a lot, but is so worth the price. There just isnít another car out there like it, and now itís mine, all mine."

I can see what youíre saying.

"Itís not just that. Itís so new and responsive. I've had cars in the past but this one; this one I am going to take care of. Iím never going to let the needle get past ľ empty, because Iíve heard that if you let it get to the 'low on gas' light then sludge runs through your engine and it wonít last as long or perform as well."

I hear you.

"And as for dirt! I wash that thing, (Mabel, I call her Mabel), once a week down at the car wash. She really hates being dirty. She uses up plenty of quarters, but I get the wax polish too so that she shines. The gleam, the stripe down her from front to backÖsheís so unique, I just jump around the place when I think of her. Sometimes I wave at people as I drive with the windows down and the music up, a huge smile on my face because I'm the lucky one to be her driver."

I know what you mean.

"I bring her in for all of her check-ups. Every three thousands miles itís like she reminds me that she needs to go in; Iím right there at the car care center with her, getting her new oil and a courtesy brake check. They check her alignment and rotate the tires and basically give her everything she needs to function beautifully. I can practically hear her purr each time we leave the mechanic."

I totally get you.

"And that road trip? Wow! Mabel was beyond belief. She put herself way out there, responding to every light press of my foot on the gas pedal, gliding to a halt at each red light. The steering wheel slid from side to side with each turn and you wouldnít believe the miles per gallon she ran on! It was sheer joy being in that driverís seat. It was as if Mabel knew exactly what I needed and when I needed it and was happy to comply. I didnít even come close to an accident because she turned and stopped and stayed in her line so flawlessly. When I stopped to eat she would sit in the parking lot with a look on her face as if to say, ďWhen are you going to drive me again? You are the only driver for me. Speed up on that burger, Iím hungry for more of this being driven business.Ē

And when we arrived in Kansas, now donít think Iím crazy, but it felt like she was as excited as I was that we had made it there together.

As for those leather seatsÖ."

Jemma?

"..they were like sliding on new ice; plush, comfortable, no back problemsÖ"

Jemma?

"Oh, sorry. Yes, Lord?"

Have you ever thought that you might be that kind of car to me?

"What?"

Your journey with me is like one or many long road trips. Iíd like to be your owner, your driver on every one of them. Will you be my MabelÖ..?


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Phyllis Inniss 07/25/05
Very cute and funny. Thanks for sharing.
Crista Darr07/25/05
Great message!
Cheri Hardaway 07/25/05
I really enjoyed reading this! And you totally surprised me with the ending - I was fully expecting Jemma to be gently chastised for being so taken up with the car, like God was feeling neglected. It was neat to instead have Him use what was so important to Jemma to speak to her heart about how important she was to Him. Neat twist and great message! Thanks.
Karen Deikun07/26/05
Yeah, you surprised me too. I was also expecting the idol thing. Interesting take on the topic.
Nina Phillips07/26/05
I liked the concept, realizing how patient God is. I thought that there would be a boom at the end. But there wasn't, just that still small voice throughout. God bless ya, littlelight
Shirley Thomas07/26/05
I really enjoyed your article. It speaks volumes! Thanks for sharing!
Beth Muehlhausen07/27/05
Enjoyed your creative approach - the discussion with God. What a punch at the end! Very convicting.
janet rubin07/28/05
Terrific! Easy and fun to read. Touching. God is a good listener as we ramble!
Kyle Chezum07/29/05
This was great! Good job.
terri tiffany07/29/05
Loved the ending!
Maxx .07/30/05
gotta love it. Talented author. Good work.
Debbie OConnor08/01/05
I love it Sally! I'm so glad you had God use the car to show Jemma how much He loves her instead of the predictable idol thing. Excellent work. Loved the humor and great description throughout.
Val Clark08/06/05
I too liked the unpredictability of the end. And the contemporary voice you have given God as He interjects work for me.