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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Asia (02/26/09)

TITLE: Haikus for the King
By Linda Payne
03/01/09


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Creative power, life force
Word of God moves over all
brings life from nothing

Born in humbleness
a lamb pure and innocent
blood-stained sacrifice

A Seed dropped to earth
to grow and flourish, then die
so all might have life

Manna from heaven
nourishing, broken and shared
Bread of Life given

Let down your bucket
draw from his well sweet water
never thirst again

Illuminating
radiance chases away
shadows of darkness

The touch of a hand
blesses, forgives, heals, accepts
Redeemer touch me

The Shepherd’s voice calls
calls to his wandering sheep
come home where you’re safe

A Father waiting
reaches out with loving arms
a lost child comes home

A priceless Pearl giv’n
for love of the entire world
worthy of all my life

King most glorious
Son of God and Lord of Lords
humbly washed our feet

Mocked, derided, scorned
beaten and hung on a cross
by his stripes we’re healed

The sun rises up
an empty tomb discovered
death has been conquered


Note: Haiku is a form of tanka, a type of poetry practiced in the Japanese court during the 9th through the 12th centuries. It is characterized by three lines of 17 syllables, 5-7-5. Traditional Japanese haikus do not have titles and do not use metaphors or similes. Haiku is about simplicity, paring down the excess to reveal truth.


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Joanne Sher 03/05/09
Just beautiful. I love Haiku, and you have done them masterfully. Each one is a beautiful picture, and a masterpiece as a whole.
Eliza Evans 03/05/09
There are some lovely phrases here but haikus seldom "tell." They show and are written in the _present tense._

They are most often about a single moment and observation connecting us to nature, the seasons and life. I like the definition "one breath poetry" It truly is an art.

By the way - You use several metaphors here - Pearl, Lamb, Seed, Bread, Shepherd/sheep etc.

Aside from all the technical stuff, what you have written here is heartfelt and meaningful.
Gregory Kane03/08/09
This is a lovely devotional piece, drawing us into Christ's love.
I admire you for writing a form of poetry that comes from another culture (if I'm not making an unfair assumption there...) I think it is extremely difficult to do well, but this is beautiful.
Sharon Kane03/08/09
Sorry, I didn't see Gregory was logged on. That comment was from me.
Karlene Jacobsen 03/10/09
This is simple and beautiful; coming from a poetry illiterate (but I'm learning) *smile*.
Beth LaBuff 03/12/09
There are so many wonderful forms of poetry. Your talent is evident with this amazing piece. Very nice writing!