The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh this is so rich! What a sad tale but praise the Lord for the youth group who took the time to minister to Mia. What a promising end! I loved the poetry that flowed through the story too. Well written!
03/02/09
Your first two paragraphs are a masterpiece of inference, and I love the way you wove the beautiful poetry throughout this story. Beautiful note of hope at the end--excellent story.
This is the third entry I've read that could be taken so much further. Wonderful read, great job.
The intertwining of story and poetry was a beautiful mix! I like how the story ended with much hope. Very good. Thank you for sharing this!
03/03/09
The weaving of story and song was beautiful, and I'm so glad that the story ended hopefully! Lovely writing.
03/03/09
Extremely evocative writing. I was absolutely engaged, and I love the hope at the end. Beautifully done.
03/04/09
Your written words always capture me. The pace is good, the "hints" of her life perfect and the hope at the end made me whisper..."run quickly." Thank you for sharing yoru gift of writing.
03/04/09
Fantastic. The hopelessness portrayed from the first line was so glaring against the beautiful poetry. I'm a sucker for a happy ending, so I loved it. But it wasn't forced and that made it so much better.
03/04/09
The depth of this entry had to be totally inspired. Hope amid hopelessness and even mixed with poetry. Wow. Take it to the hurting masses.
03/04/09
I actually missed the tremendous power of the title. I should have been equally impressed with hope amid hopelessness when time has run out. Even more remarkable.
03/04/09
Woo! you just get better and better! I loved this piece! Especially the way you wove things together and the descriptions, made me feel like I was right there.
This story reminds me of what an outstanding gift you have for writing--from the sordid to the hopeful, laid out in precise words.
03/05/09
Congratulations on your EC. Beautiful story-telling--you had me drawn in from the beginning.
Beautiful story of redemption, hope and trust and the power of language and remembrances. Congratulations on your EC placement!
03/05/09
Very nice Michele. Your language is evocative, and strong.

Congratulations on a great place!
03/05/09
Amazing writing. Very well-deserved EC!
03/05/09
Congratulations! This was beautiful, obviously emerging from the author's empathetic heart---completely inspiring tale of enduring hope. Very well done.
03/05/09
I really loved the flow of this entry. Through the hopelessness of your mc, you painted the picture of a positive future. Very nice writing - very creative. Congratulations!