The Official Writing Challenge
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02/27/09
Oh how sad. I could feel the pain and desperation so vividly. This was an incredibly moving piece.
You did a good job of evoking emotion with this piece. My heart really felt for the children and their situation. Your title also fits the story perfectly. Nice job with this! Thanks for sharing.
03/05/09
Congratulations on your EC. I want more of the story...what happens to these little kids? Maybe in a future challenge entry? :)
03/05/09
A very moving story. The pain and the injustice of th suffering of innocent children came through very powerfully. Congratulations!
03/05/09
Oh - wonderful piece! You did such a fine job with the imagery.

Love your photo on your profile page by the way.
03/05/09
This is a sad commentary on the legacy left by someone who cared more about her own ways than the future of her children. Another example of children being cheated out of their childhood. Good writing.