The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 665 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
02/19/09
I liked this piece. There are lots of good character descriptions.

A couple of notes on India. Names are tough to choose. Vivek is a first name, not last. Also, Indian Airlines is a domestic carrier. The international counterpart is Air India.

The last line is perfect for the story.
02/21/09
Yes, that last bit held out just enough hope. Nicely done.
This was a sweet story of love and hope. I too, loved the last line, leaving me hopeful for both of them.
02/23/09
Just beautiful storytelling. I was very engaged in this piece, and loved the characterization.
Sweet and romantic! I think the second to last paragraph might be better split into two...his feelings...then her feelings. As it is I had to reread it to make sure I had gotten the message. Great last line.
02/25/09
Love the ending! It hints at what was to come, while allowing the reader to use his imagination. Great job!