The Official Writing Challenge
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02/19/09
This is a great story of love strings and the pain of change--very poignantly told. Great job.
02/19/09
I love this tender and bittersweet story so much, especially because of the details: the sliding of the bracelets, the way she feels slender at the touch at her waist...this is a very writerly piece. Just beautiful.
02/19/09
You captured the scene well, with vivid emotions and details. I liked the title, too, with the multiple meanings. Good job.
02/21/09
Really lovely writing but be careful. That first sentence is way overdone and I almost stopped reading right there.

Just my opinion. :)

02/22/09
Wonderful descriptions, and a vivid portrayal of conflicting cultures without being overdone.
02/23/09
Oh the pain of watching our children grow and move in directions we did not go.
This was good, although I felt a little undone at the end. Perhaps that is what I am to feel, as per the title.
02/23/09
I enjoyed all the details and when the piece ended, I wasn't ready to be done! Great job.
02/23/09
I'm amazed at the beautiful, subtle complexity of this! I loved being able to see through the eyes of this mother, as she watches so much change and realizes that she can't control it. Very well done!
02/24/09
With each convert we rejoice, but forget how painful it is for the unsaved family to accept. Beautifully written.
02/24/09
You made the emotions of the mother so clear with your descriptive piece. Really well written.
02/24/09
I was grew more and more captured in the story and the characters as I read. This is such a tender scene. Well done.
02/24/09
I love your writing!
Seriously, you always capture the emotions so beautifully. I always feel tempted to jump into analyzing mode because it reminds me of great literature. Pieces like this one should not end so quickly - I would really like to read more! LOL here I am raving on and on.... :)
02/25/09
Beautifully written as always. You should write a sequel; I was left dying to know what the father says and what the outcome is!
02/25/09
Beautiful - my heart was torn and breaking with this mother's. The opening lines were exquisite, setting the whole tone to the piece.
02/25/09
The atmosphere you create here is remarkable.
02/26/09
You had me from your first word, and I clung to the last. So very lush and vivid. I loved this. Congratulations on your EC!
06/24/11
I kind of like that first sentence now. I guess I'm growing up! :) :) Bless you, Lisa.