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02/20/09
A sweet love story.

There were some sections here that seemed more "tell" than "show". Not being familiar with the culture, I wonder how realistic it is?

But it certainly had a wonderful ending for the romantic in me.
Very romantic, though only for those outside of India. To break an engagement, especially on the wedding day, would be dishonorable. She would never cause her family such disgrace. It's hard for outsiders to understand how hard a family searches for a suitable match for their child. Nice story telling.
02/23/09
Well-written but completely unrealistic.