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02/20/09
Very interesting approach!
Vibrant descriptions. The Focus-Snap-Save started getting in the way. Maybe just one word, like SNAP or SAVE would have been sufficient. Very heartfelt.
02/23/09
Thank you, This story gave us the very heart of what India is trying to achieve these days. I thought "FOCUS, SNAP, SAVE" captured the soul of the story beautifully, as the young man was leaving all he knew and understood for a very long time. They brought into focus his long-term intention of returning to India to practice with his father and to marry within family tradition and agreement. This is a very interesting proposition for today's young people - because it often works!

Loved the name.
02/23/09
I liked the "pictures" you created with words in this piece.

I have one question, though. Holi is in March or April. School in the U.S. begins in August or September. Why would the MC be leaving India in the spring?

Good work here.