The Official Writing Challenge
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02/20/09
This was very intriguing, and full of mystery.

...but I found it a bit disturbing as well, and I definitely wanted more. Instead, I felt a little bit empty at the end...maybe the effect you were going for?

Lots of great local color.
Different...not sure if it's dark or fantasy. Though I think it's intentional.
02/22/09
You used a lot of authentic details in this piece. This ending to this entry left me confused.