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I felt like I was right there watching the story unfold. I could feel the heat and sense the emotions.
Great story. One tiny problem. You said this took place in Brazil, but the song and the speech are in Spanish, rather than Portuguese. That's an easy fix. Otherwise, this is very good.
Wonderful and vivid descriptions, with a compelling tale. Very nicely done.
Oh, how sad! Very well written.

I believe they speak Portuguese in Brazil, however...oops.

Love the hope at the end...very tender.
Very well told. You brought me right in to feel the emotions of the people invovled. By the way, there are Spanis-Americans, maybe there are Spanish Brazilians :)
Thank God there is a better place than this world to look forward to. (I wonder if they speak Spanish or Portugese in Heaven?) Excellent story.
Wow...this little glimpse not only tugs at the heart, but also points out the need for Living Water and childlike faith is universal. Nicely done.