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02/05/09
I like how you showed the progression of Lillian's adventure - her trip away from Canada - back to Canada and also her spiritual adventure. Nice writing.
02/06/09
A lovely story of forgiveness that really drew me in. I like the way you included the young and old voices of Lillian. Well done!
I liked the relationship between grandmother and granddaughter. It was neat how you had the granddaughter being the one to support, comfort and console. Beautiful expressions of love and forgiveness.
02/09/09
Excellent writing. You put me in the middle of the prairie, and inside Lillian's heart.
02/09/09
Lovely writing on several levels. I missed reading your entries. Welcome back!
02/10/09
Very nice story arc here--like a wave, with excellent pacing.
02/11/09
What a journey! This is heart-wrenching. It touches in all the special places. So glad that she was able to forgive and recieve release. Loved this. ^_^
Good story, wonderful characters, and an outstanding last line!
02/11/09
Beautiful. I enjoyed the scenery and dialogue very much.
02/12/09
I loved your opening paragraphs, and felt transported onto the windswept prairies. The story unfolded well and came full circle to a beautiful conclusion.
You did an excellent job with your story a forgiving pilgrimage.
I can't imagine what it would be like to have to move away from all you cared about only to return years later with only your memories.

At first I missed the Canada reference in the opening line, so I wasn't sure where "home" was, but then I went back and re-read and cleared up the confusion I had.