The Official Writing Challenge
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02/05/09
So sad - You really drew this reader into your moving story.
02/06/09
Lovely story. That last line was perfect.
02/08/09
Such a sweet, sad story. I liked it alot. Well-written. I felt the longing.
Mona
02/11/09
Sad, touching story. Your opening paragraph caught me and pulled me in. :)
02/12/09
Such a sad sad story. Yet it illustrates the truth of Solomon's writing: Many waters can not quench love, Rivers can not wash it away. Well told.
02/12/09
The writing is really lovely here but for me, the story would have been more effective if they had had a real life together before he left. (married/children) She was only 17. It just feels like the MC is so stuck in the far past and she ended up living a really introspective, boring life. I find that hard to admire in a character.

Just my opinion.

Really gorgeous writing though.:)
02/12/09
Such intense emotions! The end is doubly sad. I didn't see that last line coming. Congratulations on your EC. The judges were right on here. :)
02/14/09
Beautiful, sad, well done, creative, and congrats!