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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Canada (01/29/09)

TITLE: Drafty Escape
By Tim Pickl
02/03/09


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Gathered by the water today,
We’re simply living by faith,
Relying on our Creator, God--
He comforts us with His love

Days pass and protests come--
We fight to survive for the Son
Wrongful war’s not worth a life:
It causes only division and strife

Forced to battle is not love at all--
Forced to war causes us to fall--
We’ll escape on wings of freedom:
We’ll fight up there for the Son--

It’s time to fly,
It’s time to go--
We’ll fly up toward the goal--
United for Canada as one soul,
United for Canada as one soul!

Freedom’s come!
It’s time to embark!
It’s the appointed day--
It’s the appointed day--
God will point the way--
God will point the way!

Breaking the breeze,
Only one leads--
“V” is for Victory--
“V” is for Victory!

Flying so high,
Freedom shines--
We touch the sky--
We touch the sky!

The leader tires and goes to the back,
Another moves up and takes up the slack--

It’s time to fly,
It’s time to go--
We’ll fly up toward the goal--
United for Canada as one soul,
United for Canada as one soul!

We’re almost there, we’re almost home--
Right over the border, we’ll touch down--

Finally here we can see,
Finally we’re home free--
Strong and free--
Strong and free!

Living in Canada now away from U.S.,
We flock together and live for Jesus

and in His name…
and in His name…

et en son nom


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Lynda Schultz 02/06/09
Very clever—who would have thought to write from the perspective a Canada Goose—and to make it sound like a prison escape!
Karlene Jacobsen 02/09/09
I didn't catch that this was about the geese, but should have when you mentioned the V for victory. My brain must be melting.(lol)
I did really enjoy your poem.
Catrina Bradley 02/09/09
Was this written to be set to music? It has a very strong, but subtle beat.

I don't understand the first three stanzas - who are they at war with? but once they made their escape, I was flying in formation with them, spirit soaring. Unique, creative, and uplifting.
Linda Payne02/10/09
I finally caught on when you mentioned the V. Very imaginative. The geese are wonderful to watch as they fly.
Jan Ackerson 02/10/09
Very good--I especially like the use of repetition here, because I'd imagine that's how geese think...that may not make sense, but it does to me!
Gerald Shuler 02/11/09
So the geese don't like Americans shooting them? I always wondered why they kept returning to Canada.

Vivid writing... I enjoyed it.
Glynis Becker 02/11/09
Very very clever. And I like the rhythm of the verses. Great poetry.
Sharon Kane02/12/09
Very creative! I'm glad other comments gave the game away as I was dumb enough to miss the plot completely. On the second reading it all came together and I really enjoyed it. Excellent writing.