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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Canada (01/29/09)

TITLE: Strange Beauty
By Jan Ackerson
02/03/09


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Across the windswept Yukon plain, a single snowflake falls
Aurora borealis drapes the skies
While in the leaden distances, one lonely she-wolf calls
This barren loveliness is Godís surprise

Aurora borealis drapes the skies
My heart, a frozen prairieland, knows desolation, too
This barren loveliness is Godís surprise
In countless shades of white and grey, in pale and shadowed hue

My heart, a frozen prairieland, knows desolation, too
Yet with Godís touch, strange beauty is revealed
In countless shades of white and grey, in pale and shadowed hue
And with His breath, the icy patches yield

Yet with Godís touch, strange beauty is revealed
Who would have thought that richness could in emptiness be found?
And with His breath, the icy patches yield
So tundraóheart and prairie--becomes consecrated ground

Who would have thought that richness could in emptiness be found?
Far, far away, one lonely she-wolf calls
So tundraóheart and prairie--becomes consecrated ground
On Yukonís plain, a single snowflake falls


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Lynda Schultz 02/05/09
I was fascinated by how you repeated the key lines. Very nice.
Joanne Sher 02/06/09
Oh - this is one of those amazing poetic forms, isn't it? It is masterfully done, and the imagery is just beautiful. The repetition is extremely effective.
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/06/09
I don't know if theres a special name for this patter of poetry, but it is amazingly well done with wonderful pictures. I loved it.
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/06/09
(oops...pattern was the word I meant)
Sonya Leigh02/07/09
This is a beautiful poetry form, made all the more appealing by your well chosen words. Simply lovely.
Eliza Evans 02/07/09
Thank you for sharing!
Just gorgeous! A beautiful tribute to Canada.
Love the title, too. :)
Catrina Bradley 02/08/09
Very nice! You painted a beautiful portrait of Canada.
Linda Payne02/09/09
I was going to say this was gorgeous, then I noticed someone else used the same word, but it truly is. Your poem really touched my heart, and I loved the way you interwove the various phrases. This is a winner in my book!
Leah Nichols 02/09/09
Very beautiful, and I love the poetic form! It's very reminiscent of the Psalms....I've thought about trying something like that myself. Masterfully done!
Gerald Shuler 02/09/09
You've been paying attention to your own Master classes... wonderful Pantoum poem. I was riveted by the images your words created. My body even felt the chill of the air as that one single snowflake brushed past my cheek.
Diana Dart 02/09/09
Wonderful, just wonderful. The form is just... magical.
Karlene Jacobsen 02/09/09
I love the poem. It was neat how the pattern of the last line becoming the third in the next verse formed. Very good.
Sharlyn Guthrie02/10/09
Exquisite! This poetry form (pantoum?)is tremendously effective with certain topics, and it definitely works for this one! I've never attempted it, but this is inspiring...I may have to play with it one of these days very soon.
Sara Harricharan 02/11/09
I like it. I like the way the length/words switch around and the descriptions for things like the aurora borealis. Nice. ^_^
Angela M. Baker-Bridge02/11/09
Breath taking! Awesome job...another master piece.
Anne Linington02/12/09
This is top of my personal list. Love the repetition of the lines reinforcing the beautiful imagery with the secene reflecting the MC's heart. Congratulations.
Helen Paynter02/12/09
How long did this take you, Jan? Very beautiful - haunting, in fact. And extremely clever. Hats off.
Joshua Janoski04/20/09
Your writing talent knows no bounds as you demonstrate in this piece. I'm loving getting caught up on some of your recent entries.