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02/05/09
An adorable story. I liked the message in this piece.
02/06/09
Very on topic. I hope Patrick got those tickets!
02/06/09
May we always be a nation that knows how to say "sorry" — and a little faster would be nice. lol. Good story.
Good story. We should always be ready to ask for forgiveness as well as forgive. Thanks for sharing!
02/11/09
Awwww! I sure hope he wins those tickets. What a cute story with an adorable character! I enjoyed the entire read. ^_^
02/11/09
Patrick is a precious character! And Momma so wise. I could see this published in a youth magazine. Nice job.

Great story here with an excellent message.
02/12/09
Great story! Wonderful cover on the topic and a unique point that not many people know.

Careful of POV - it seemed to start out with Mama's point of view - make sure you're clear who is the MC so the reader can easily follow the storyline.

Well done! I liked this one very much.
Thanks, Leah! It wasnt until after I had submitted that I realized I had changed POV at least twice! lol! Thank you for the suggestions, very helpful!