The Official Writing Challenge
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01/29/09
So many ways to see a "united" kingdom here. What a creative mind to come up with this! Very good.
01/30/09
I love the gradual re-shaping of their relationship--very sweet.

It's hard to tell a story that spans so many years in 750 words. I wonder if it'd have more "show, not tell" in it if you just told the story from Scotland and later, and included more dialogue and other details of characterization to help us know the women better as individuals.

Love the title, and I always get a lump in my throat when a story features reconciliation.
01/30/09
It's hard to imagine sisters not enjoying each other but it happens and it is so amazing when they finally realize what they have missed. Thanks for showing us the joy of making things right.
So much in so little time. I liked the relationship tension and hope of restoration.