The Official Writing Challenge
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I love how you weave the young couple's tender story in with the clock, even bringing it full circle from her uncovering her husband's physical eyes, to him seeking to unveil her emotional eyes, with God's help.
01/30/09
Oh, how sad, and very tenderly written.

FYI--"Big Ben" is not the clock, nor even the tower, but the largest bell inside.

I felt very fond of this couple, and wanted to reach out to them in their sadness. You wrote them very well!

02/02/09
I think you wrote the couple well.
Is there another way to write this maybe? "Suddenly, she feels a peace rush through her pores"
Just a thought.:)
This was quite touching, first joy then sadness then hope again. Beautifully done.