The Official Writing Challenge
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Date
01/31/09
I was really able to picture the charming shop, and would have loved to shop there.

The introduction of the dying old lady seemed to come out of left field, and to have little to do with the first part of the story. You sort of lost me in the last few paragraphs.

I appreciated the spring-y references, as I'm VERY ready for spring!
The scenery in the beginning was beautiful. I wanted to be along for the ride.