The Official Writing Challenge
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12/13/08
Sounds like slobbish present day comments (spit). Fun read - spaces between paragraphs helps for easier reading. (spit) LOL. Col

All the best for the coming Christmas and New Year!
I love the voice of your narrator. This is a delightful look at the Christmas story.

(Your story would be easier to read with spaces between paragraphs.)
12/16/08
I love this! It would make a great monologue in a play. You should write it. The contradictions and out of frame references (Christmas, Ceasarean and Holiday Inn humor) all made it that much more fun. Great job!