The Official Writing Challenge
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12/06/08
Your description of the little boy "like a yo-yo as he stretched on tip-toes" was so good. I could see him. My heart went out to this little guy. I had to smile at the "train whistle goes it's her blowing me kisses."
This is very touching. Your imagery is impeccable. I could see Marvin bouncing up and down in the window as he watched the train.
Congratulations! I enjoyed this touching story.
12/11/08
You have a beautiful writing style Jack. If you join us on the boards you can get a lot more comments each week because we hint at which one is ours once the judging is done.
Way to go, Jack and congratulations on your placement. It is well deserved and your work is a pleasure to read. Loren
I always enjoy your thoughtful writing and this one didn't disappoint.
Congratulations on you win.