The Official Writing Challenge
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12/06/08
Your description of the little boy "like a yo-yo as he stretched on tip-toes" was so good. I could see him. My heart went out to this little guy. I had to smile at the "train whistle goes it's her blowing me kisses."
12/08/08
This is very touching. Your imagery is impeccable. I could see Marvin bouncing up and down in the window as he watched the train.
12/11/08
Congratulations! I enjoyed this touching story.
12/11/08
You have a beautiful writing style Jack. If you join us on the boards you can get a lot more comments each week because we hint at which one is ours once the judging is done.
12/11/08
Way to go, Jack and congratulations on your placement. It is well deserved and your work is a pleasure to read. Loren
12/11/08
I always enjoy your thoughtful writing and this one didn't disappoint.
Congratulations on you win.