The Official Writing Challenge
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12/06/08
I loved your line, "I don't think our little Jessie can wait for Mercy." :) Your twist ending is great.
There isn't any one part I liked more than another. It flowed well, and the shift letting me know he was dreaming was great.
12/09/08
Clever title, clever parallels with the Christmas story, and so much heart-felt emotion. Nicely done.
12/09/08
Nicely done! I like the (almost) repeating lines when Josh wakes and reaches for Mary. I like the ending line too. A really good story.