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12/04/08
So beautiful that it made me cry--both for its beauty, and for longing. Wow.
Wow! The is absolutely beautiful! This speaks to the
grandmother in me who experienced similar feelings with my first grandchild.
12/04/08
I've read this poem several times, and lines keep taking me by surprise, this being one of my favorites:

"this very day, this Christmas Day,
while snow

falls softly, as snow should fall
on a Christmas Day"

I had a hard time finding a natural rhythm, and wondered about your choice of line and stanza breaks. I'm only beginning to learn to appreciate poetry, tho. :)

I was surprised to find that the MC was the grandmother, it put an entirely new twist in the plot of the poem. You've managed to tell a lot in a few beautiful words.
12/04/08
What a wonderful, "Remarkable" Christmas gift. Your word choices AND this poem are exquisite!
12/05/08
Good Work and I want to say Congratulations and Merry Christmas!
Simply remarkable poem, in every way!
My kids aren't old enough to make me a grandma yet, but I will love to experience the wonder of it.
This is a beautiful recounting of what must be a precious time.