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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Itís Christmas Day (in the present or living memory) (11/27/08)

TITLE: Remarkably
By Leigh MacKelvey
12/02/08


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It was four in the morning,
the first glimpse
of winter, snowflakes fastening
in a myriad of odd designs

to my windshield as I drove
to the spot
I was summoned when
I thought to myself

there was no sure way
of telling
when this angel would appear,
but never did I think

of Christmas day as the
appointed time.
So in the white-walled room,
among hushed voices,

a bright light and halo of
soft down hair shone
and legions of officials hovered
at your call,

stethoscopes and scales,
sterile oohs and ahhs
pour forth from round O mouths
and bounce off

the square-tiled ceiling
to anoint
your precious crown, that's when
I thought again

how remarkable
Godís plans,
how He can determine a first birth,
a first child,

My first grandchild,
to come
this very day, this Christmas Day,
while snow

falls softly, as snow should fall
on a Christmas Day
and the earth is quiet, still,
and when your daddy

rocks you in his arms,
looks up,
meets my eye, smiles
and says

I think weíll call her Victoria.


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Jan Ackerson 12/04/08
So beautiful that it made me cry--both for its beauty, and for longing. Wow.
Laura Anne Harrison12/04/08
Wow! The is absolutely beautiful! This speaks to the
grandmother in me who experienced similar feelings with my first grandchild.
Catrina Bradley 12/04/08
I've read this poem several times, and lines keep taking me by surprise, this being one of my favorites:

"this very day, this Christmas Day,
while snow

falls softly, as snow should fall
on a Christmas Day"

I had a hard time finding a natural rhythm, and wondered about your choice of line and stanza breaks. I'm only beginning to learn to appreciate poetry, tho. :)

I was surprised to find that the MC was the grandmother, it put an entirely new twist in the plot of the poem. You've managed to tell a lot in a few beautiful words.
Beth LaBuff 12/04/08
What a wonderful, "Remarkable" Christmas gift. Your word choices AND this poem are exquisite!
Dianne Janak12/05/08
Good Work and I want to say Congratulations and Merry Christmas!
Sharlyn Guthrie12/09/08
Simply remarkable poem, in every way!
Karlene Jacobsen 12/09/08
My kids aren't old enough to make me a grandma yet, but I will love to experience the wonder of it.
This is a beautiful recounting of what must be a precious time.