The Official Writing Challenge
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11/29/08
GooooD writing! I enjoyed reading this so much. I loved the pargraph at the jewlery counter. Such clever descritptions A +++++
11/29/08
Great writing. Your characters came alive and were so very likeable. Home - just as it is - turns out the best place to be. Well done.
11/30/08
Loved your opening and your humor. Thanks for the good laugh. This was a very fun read.
11/30/08
Superb voice! Love this entry, and poor Irving!
12/01/08
Wonderful humor and fun characterization. This made my morning. Well done.
12/01/08
Brilliant writing. "I shot him a look that could melt diamonds"... And yet Irving melted her heart at the end. Superb!
12/01/08
I love your MC. Irving has to be one very easy-going man. The unique romance here is priceless. :)
12/01/08
Ohhhhh, I LOVE this!!! Your descriptions (The sales clerk wore so much mascara I wondered how she was able to lift her eyelids made me laugh out loud) and characterization are excellent! Loved the end... it brought a smile.
12/01/08
Cat, I'm back again. You asked me to come back and write some red ink in. Well, I just don't have much red ink to go with this entry! I do love it. the only think I would say is that the first half was so good and then the second half just wasn't as much fun. But I think it's because you had to rush it for word count. If you ever plan on expanding this into a longer story, beef up the second half to match the wonderful witty word choices in the first half! That's all the red ink for you, folks.
12/01/08
Your story is humorous, fun and heartwarming, too. Loved the ending. Great job!
12/02/08
I have to admit I could relate to this on a personal level. Even though your words were limited, you developed your characters well. This was a fun read, and I love the ending. It made me smile. Oh, and I love Aunt Betty, too.
12/03/08
I'm glad her heart was changed in the end. Although I really didn't like her character at the beginning and at the mall! Loved your writing and descriptions - a very visual piece. :)