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11/20/08
Very engaging story of the Three Wise Men, and brilliantly told. I have to admit I wore my dictionary out looking up words that were out of my realm...which led to many detours and distractions. This entry is strictly for the elite and wise, and written by an exceptional writer with a great mind. Good job!
11/26/08
You captured the wise men's excitement brilliantly. We often focus on their arrival in Bethlehem but don't often think of the preparations or their own emotions as they readied themselves for the journey. Like the previous commentator some of the words were out of my range, but isn't that part of why we read? To educate ourselves! My one disappointment was that we didn't hear from the old mentor, and I felt that weakened the ending. Finishing with a quote from him I think would have been stronger.
12/01/08
Wonderful, Helen. An inspiring story drawing the reader into wanting to be part of the action themselves; the mark of a great writer.
God bless and keep writing.