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11/14/08
Sweet, lump-in-the-throat story, with a really deft touch with dialogue. I felt as if I knew Rhonda, without having her say a single word.

One teensy thing: your title foreshadows the ending.

I felt myself very drawn to your flawed main character--because I, too, am flawed! Well done.
11/15/08
Very nice job with the dialogue. I was definitely drawn to your MC. Lovely story.
11/15/08
This is creative and VERy realistic. When I looked at your title, I thought it referred to making a mistake by holding a grudge so long over a cute Christmas card. Your ending twisted it a bit. That's just my take on it, though.

I wonder how many misunderstandings happen like this in our non-fiction lives... over an "unreturned" phone call or email. Or Christmas card. Thought-provoking.
11/16/08
Thank you for a powerful, thought provoking, convicting story. I've been the one falsely judged and know her friend would be thrilled to hear from her, even without an apology or explanation.
11/16/08
Great flow to this story. I appreciated the honesty portrayed in it. This made it all the more believable.
11/17/08
I really enjoyed this story. Emotion evoking and thought provoking. Great writing!
11/17/08
I NEED to know how this card got into this purse and was never found by Audrey—it's a thread that feels like it was left hanging. Other than that—which might only be my peculiar perversity—this is really good.
11/20/08
You chose a creative way to show how easily misunderstandings can hurt a friendship. Excellently done.