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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Christmas Lights (10/30/08)

TITLE: The Lights In The Valley Below
By T. F. Chezum
11/05/08


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The Lights In The Valley Below

Leaving early from my dad’s
Heading home to get some sleep
Early schedule I must keep
Kids are moping, looking sad

Trav’ling down the country trail
Toward the city lights ahead
Childhood mem’ries fill my head
Visions flash in great detail

Dad would wait ‘til after dark
In the car we both would climb
Always such a special time
Light the Christmas spirit spark

Heading up the mountain road
Driving ‘round on winter nights
Gazing at the Christmas lights
In the city down below

We’d sing carols in the car
Moving slow along the butte
Glim’ring houses so minute
Like a billion twinkling stars

Hues of blue and red and green
Shining from the valley floor
How it made my spirit soar
Such a dazzling Christmas scene

Thinking ‘bout my childhood thrills
Wond’ring if my boys would care
I drive past the city glare
And head off into the hills


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LauraLee Shaw11/06/08
Ah memories. Great ones. Thank you.
Verna Cole Mitchell 11/06/08
I enjoyed the ride down Memory Mountain with you. I could feel the rhythm of the car--a good thing for a poem!
Joanne Sher 11/10/08
I love the images of this. I could picture it so clearly.

Probably just me, but I found myself stumbling over your ABBA rhyme scheme. Kept wanting it to be ABAB (LOL must be the legalist in me!).

Lovely.
Sharlyn Guthrie11/10/08
This is a keeper! I really like the nostalgia and then the way the last line brings it back around.
Celeste Ammirata11/10/08
I love the memories this poem brings to me. :-) Thank you! Great job.
Leah Nichols 11/11/08
Nice variation on poetry. Good memories too.
Tim Pickl11/12/08
Excellent poetic rhyming and cadence...can the next generation capture the magic of it all with all the distractions we give them? Thanks for sharing.
Dianne Janak11/12/08
This made me excited for Christmas this year, with our first grandkids almost 2 whom may kind of get into the spirit and joy of it this year! Good writing!
Dee Yoder 11/12/08
Wow, I'd love to see a sight like that! Very lovely and gives me such anticipation of the lights and views of Christmas!
George Parler 11/12/08
This was pure pleasure from beginning to end. By the last stanza I found myself staring at an original Thomas Kincaid master piece in my mind. Well done.
Beth LaBuff 11/13/08
I really like your rhyme pattern and the way it makes this flow. Very creative work (I was trying to comment after bricks, but for some reason it wouldn't let me. *sigh*)
Angela M. Baker-Bridge11/16/08
In so few words you embraced three generations with heart-felt emotion...quite an accomplishment!