The Official Writing Challenge
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Unique approach to the topic. Lots of atmosphere descriptions and back-story history, but I didn't "feel" the emotion a story like this could evoke. Many great timely messages here.
11/02/08
This is wonderfully descriptive. I felt like I was right there with her. Very compelling.
11/03/08
'Pins and needles in my heart' What a wonderful expression! A very good description of the downward slide that leads to a bankrupt life. I felt the upward turn was a bit too sudden to ring true, but maybe the healing had already begun and she hadn't really noticed.
Pins and needles is exactly what my limbs feel like when waking up after circulation was cut off.
Great job, and wonderful ending.
Beautiful. I'm misty-eyed. You're writing always touches my heart!(And Congrats on your EC)
11/13/08
Very emotional piece that points us to choices and how they affect how lives as well as others. Congratulations on your EC.