The Official Writing Challenge
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10/30/08
Awwww, that was very sweet! children hold such capacities for joy and understanding that we often discount.

Thank you for sharing what so many of us loose at christmas time.
10/30/08
Awwww, that was very sweet! children hold such capacities for joy and understanding that we often discount.

Thank you for sharing what so many of us lose at christmas time.
10/30/08
Awwww, that was very sweet! children hold such capacities for joy and understanding that we often discount.

Thank you for sharing what so many of us lose at christmas time.
10/30/08
Awwww, that was very sweet! children hold such capacities for joy and understanding that we often discount.

Thank you for sharing what so many of us lose at christmas time.
11/02/08
This is a good story. Red ink: Some of the sentences seemed long and rambling. Some tightening up would help the flow. Also, maybe some kind of trigger event or object to explain the MC's sadness.

Hope this helps. :)
Aaaaawwwwwwww! How sweet!
Kids can be the most compassionate people I know.
The surprise of the children's prayers was an excellent ending. I was glad to see the progress of your mc's sadness to joy as she returned to a closeness with the Lord.
11/05/08
Thank you Lord for the prayer of the little ones! Good story!