The Official Writing Challenge
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07/18/05
Cute story. A little rough around the edges & at times the dialogue was a bit confusing. With a little work and expansion (750 words is just not enough sometimes!) this could be a great short story.
Blessings, Lynda
07/20/05
I was a little confused with the dialogue at the beginning. But warmed up towards the mid, and end. Good story. In Christ, littlelight
07/22/05
A litte work and this ia a good one, let a peer read it, or read it out loud. You have a great start here. Thank you for sharing.
07/22/05
Lovely story. The dream sequence worked really well. Ditto to Dub and Lynda's comments.
07/23/05
A touching story, makes you think about what you'd do if placed in the same situation. A bit preditable -but their meeting was the whole point and wasn't a negative :)