The Official Writing Challenge
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10/28/08
I love the scene you set with this… "large, puffy snowflakes" the "Wii-Phone" and "High-Definition Television" with the classic black and white, "It's a Wonderful Life". Thanks for the reminder too. Nice work on this!
Very detailed memories made for great visual impact. A few of the run-on sentences might work better if a period replaced the 'and' so two shorter sentences could be created. Paragraph breaks would also help organize the thoughts. Very powerful ending. Thanks for sharing.