The Official Writing Challenge
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10/23/08
LOL! This is hilarious! I enjoyed the laugh!
10/23/08
Loved it... had a good laugh at his sarcasm.

Women need to stick to the cooking, huh?
10/23/08
I loved the chemistry between this husband and wife. Your dialogue made them sizzle with personality. I'm wondering if they could teach a marriage seminar at our church. **grin**
Can't give the pies a blue ribbon, but I do give this adorable story one. :-)
10/24/08
What a wonderful couple. You've truly made them come alive for me. Great laughs too. I truly enjoyed this.
10/25/08
I could picture this so clearly - fuuny and lighthearted.
10/27/08
The mix-up in the story was so possible, I wondered......
I loved the humor and the love mixed in with your pumpkin pies.
10/27/08
This is so sweet. I love the couple's obvious affection for one another. Great characterization!
10/27/08
I love the husband's tireless devotion demonstrated in your story. This is an excellent marriage article. I hope you find a place to publish it.
10/27/08
This made me giggle. I've probably made both of those mistakes--and I'm a woman. :) Your writing had me right there in the kitchen with them.
10/27/08
Ouch…. Garlic instead of cloves.. :) what an interesting taste THAT would be.. LOL Your explanation for the mistake is great… "Cloves" vs. "a clove". Your entry is a unique twist to the traditional pumpkin pie. :) …and total fun.
10/27/08
Delightful, creative, and I'm going to see if it's at all inspires my husband (who easily could make those mistakes as he's clueless in the kitchen, except for P&J sandwiches). Angel
10/27/08
This is great! LOL!
I can totally see this going on, like a movie.
One of my favorites definitely.
10/27/08
Very nice. The mistakes he made were very cleverly written. Good job. I also like the chemistry between husband and wife. You asked for red ink and I had to really search to find something, but here goes: I thought the last line was a little awkward. You said he held her hand. I think (IMHO) perhaps you could say, "He reached for her hand." See? I said I had to search! LOL Great job!
10/28/08
Fun story, though I must add that not all males are so inept in the kitchen. Enjoyed the fun dialogue and interplay between the husband and wife.
10/29/08
Yeah, I couldn't find anything to red ink either! Excellent work - I love the dialogue between the husband and wife....a very easy read and quite enjoyable! Great job. :)
10/29/08
This is great! What a husband - goofy but lovable:) Awesome writing!
10/29/08
I'm chuckling. Nice interaction between husband and wife. I enjoyed this.