The Official Writing Challenge
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10/16/08
Extremely creative--who in the world thinks of using a Chinese checker board as a Christmas tree? And the meanings of the colors are great...I really enjoy speculative fiction, so this appealed to me quite a bit.
10/18/08
Extremely creative entry--and a little scary.

The only thing I question is the age of the boys. Their recitation of the meaning of the "Christmas tree" seemed awfully polished for 10 yr olds.

I really like the out-of-the-box thinking on this one. Great job with the topic.
10/20/08
excellent use of analogy from the marbles. If anything, I thought that the sci-fi angle detracted from the central theme of your story and that it would have worked equally better in a more conventional setting