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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Christmas Tree (10/09/08)

TITLE: A Job Well Done (or not)
By Lynda Lee Schab
10/16/08


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The tree is artificial
It stands ‘bout eight feet tall,
So many ornaments are hung
I cannot count them all.

It’s time to do my duty
And remove them from the tree
My favorite part of Christmastime,
This job belongs to me!

First the squishy red ones
On branches near the floor,
This job is so much fun
It can’t be called a chore.

Next, a painted pine cone
Then a candy cane,
A Styrofoam ball that says,
“Made with love by Jane.”

A wooden train with blue chipped paint
That Jimmy made in school
So many awesome ornaments...
Each one a precious jewel!

Paper snowflakes, metal trumpets,
Shepherds, stars, three wise men,
Angels, stockings, mini wreaths,
Toy soldiers – I counted ten!

I observe the tree with interest,
The bottom half now bare
I look up toward the star on top.
It’s time to use the chair.

My favorite ornaments are next -
The porcelain balls that shine.
Each one’s a different color
With a precise, unique design.

But as I stand upon the chair
I hear someone slam the door.
Before I’m rudely interrupted,
I must remove one more.

I turn back toward the tree
And reach for another ball.
The tree, it suddenly starts swaying
Oh no…it’s going to fall!

I leap away just as the tree
crashes to the ground.
The ornaments they scatter,
making quite a lovely sound.

In the doorway stands the lady
Hands planted on her hips
Forehead scrunched and eyes a-blazing,
Words forming on her lips.

“Sir Elliot the Third…
just look what you have done!
What took me hours to put together,
In seconds, you’ve undone!”

The lady is correct, of course,
I certainly would agree.
The room is now in shambles
As is her precious tree.

I stand up tall and proud,
And belt a loud MEOW,
It takes everything within me
Not to take a great big bow.

The lady wags a finger
I guess that means no treat.
I lift my head and prance right by.
My job here is complete.


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Chely Roach10/16/08
I wish we could use emoticons here...lol. VERY, very funny!
Laury Hubrich 10/18/08
Oh boy! How funny! Poor kitty is in for it!
Yvonne Blake 10/19/08
Hee, Hee....got me! I love the name of the cat.
Joanne Sher 10/19/08
You got me too! Great little hints, and definitely a fun piece.
Sheri Gordon10/19/08
The last two lines are so funny. I could picture that cat proudly walking away. I don't know how, but I guessed early on that it was a cat's POV. I think it was because of the ornaments coming off the bottom first. Still, very funny.
Sharlyn Guthrie10/19/08
I was getting all sentimental for the mother undressing her tree and treasuring her ornaments, Then came your twist...very clever and funny, too!
Christine Dunn10/20/08
Well done! I laughed when I realised who was taking down the Christmas tree. I really like this one.
Gerald Shuler 10/20/08
I knew it was a cat from the line about the red squishy one "near the floor". But it didn't take away from the delightful flow of your poem.
Sheri Gordon10/23/08
Congratulations on your EC. I was glad to see it placed...it was so funny.
Sharlyn Guthrie10/24/08
Congratulations, Lynda! Your spontaneity on Thrusday morning paid off!
Linda Watson Owen10/24/08
Congratulations, Lynda! I just love this 'cute as a kitten' poem! :) I read it the first day of posting and chuckled all day long thinking about it. My comment is late but wanted to tell you how much I love this little tail...er...I mean tale! heehee!