The Official Writing Challenge
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10/19/08
I like how you intertwined the two stories and then brought them together. Very good but very sad at the same time. Good writing, as always:)
10/19/08
Engaging, believable details throughout. I love the images of festive rushing and joy you create with the kids. The ending does confuse me a bit. I wanted more of a hint as to why the eldest daughter couldn't make it home, maybe some kind of foreshadower in the very beginning, such as her glancing outside at a blizzard before she makes her tree.
10/21/08
Lovey - love the weaving of the stories together. Made my eyes glisten ;)
10/22/08
I enjoyed this poignant story(s)... ..next year all my kids will be away.. :( This is very cleverly written!
10/22/08
I enjoyed this poignant story(s)... ..next year all my kids will be away.. :( This is very cleverly written!
10/23/08
Beautiful! Nicely written.
The little details in the story (like the safety pin from dry cleaned item and the kids in the back seat fussing) make this story extra special. I liked the two stories blending at the end.
10/23/08
Well thought out and drew the reader in! Enjoyable reading.