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This is a touching story of the road to healing. There were a lot of long sentences, which at times made it a little tough to read. But the story itself kept me drawn it. It might be sober, but it's definitely not a downer. It's about life's lessons. I enjoyed it. Nicely done.
10/20/08
Great sense of climax. What a shame when people are estranged from one another and death intervenes before reconciliation becomes possible.
This is a wonderful story of grace and reconciliation through Christ. It is touching and well constructed. My only suggestion would be to italicize the mother's prayer or put it in quotes in a separate paragraph. You hinted at even more of a story here. I hope you'll write chapter two.