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10/11/08
Oh, how sad! I wonder why Mrs. Jessop is the way she is? Well-written story!
10/12/08
I think Mrs. Jessop was the Grinch and Scrooge all rolled into one. :) I enjoyed this unusual creative Christmas story.
10/13/08
I like how you were able to give the characters such personality in such a small amount of time.

I would encourage you to brush up on punctuation. It's a pretty common stumbling block. Review comma usage - it can smooth out of chop up a piece.

Again, nice characterization. It makes me wish there was time to further develope their stories.
10/13/08
I love Mrs. Jessop--you portrayed her personality wonderfully.

I was a little confused as to what happened at the end...why they weren't singing. But I'm sure the word limitation caused you to have to condense.

Good dialogue. It felt realistic.
10/13/08
You did a good job capturing the readers interest right from the beginning. This was a well-written story. You are a gifted story-teller.
10/13/08
You did a great job of characterizing each member of the choir, and the choir as a body. I got a good picture of them and their sad situation. The turn in the story and the ending seemed a bit rushed to me; but the word count must have confined you. :) Cat
10/13/08
What a bittersweet story. Well written!
10/14/08
Your raised some interesting issues. Your dialogue was well written, and I enjoyed the input of all your characters.
Lovely story and beautifully told. Your characters are very real. So glad they were singing my favourite carol.
Blessings, Norms
What a great story. I'd like to see something happen that softens Mrs. Jessop's heart.
Thank goodness for the precious Meredith's in our midst; so glad she whispered that she still wanted to sing. :)
You really gave us something to think about with this piece. Where are our hearts? Well done.
Great opening paragraph and excellent characterization. I felt I knew the choir members. Very enjoyable.
10/15/08
I thought you did excellent work of portraying the different characters. I thought it could have continued on, but you did have a satisfying conclusion. :) Nice work.
10/15/08
As the kids in our church grew up, our caroling has diminshed too. ...sad!
I was hoping for a newcomer, a stranger to come in and put a new spark into the group.
10/15/08
This has a wonderful wisp of one my favorite Christmas time stories. Your characterization is superb. Great job!
You have excellent characterization, especially Mrs. Jessop.
Commas? What commas? I was too caught up in the story to notice! Good job!
I really like how each character has his/her own unique personality. Thanks for sharing, Chrissy. :)
Your descriptions of the old hall was great, especially The only sound was the occasional creaking of the rafters and the wood-rotted door rattling with the slightest breeze, and your characterisation - especially David and Mrs Jessup - were excellent. Great story.